Today we had a feedback session where we swapped essays and discussed how they could be improved and if they were easily understandable from a fresh perspective. The focal points of my feedback are:
- break page ten down into smaller more concise paragraphs (clearer for the reader and makes identifying repetition easier)
- include supporting images where beneficial (not just in case study and reflective section)
- remove unnecessary information, specifically in introduction
- some terms need to be explained (Hawthorne effect)
- clarify 5 characteristics of complexity in children’s books (could include in appendix)
I found this feedback very useful. Not just changes to make but how they can be implemented effectively. I plan to apply these changes then identify a third case study. Through roughing out images for the practical section of the project I feel I could start working on the reflective practice section of the essay and add to it as my work progresses further.
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