The notes from my draft feedback have been very helpful. I can now make an action play based on the feedback and todays conversation. I am going to
- Read my essay through a couple of times and highlight changes I think need to be made.
- Edit out overcomplicated or irrelevant sections. Simplify sentence structure to make the information easier to understand.
-looke at transitions between paragraphs and topics some seem messy
- Paraphrase larger quotes wherever possible, (leave ones where the tone of voice is informative)
- Rework introduction, get rid of the question, explain what I will be doing, introduce theorists as well as complexity, ambiguity and realism ( in order they will appear in the main body
- Restructure the reflective chapter- start by laying out the aims of the project
- rising interest in children's books- why? agendas?
- back up links to theory especially in later chapters.
- clarify own opinion when reacting to research (some are unclear)
- introduce anne fine opinions to case studies section (opposing view)
- include narrative illustrations used in healthcare into either main body or case studies section. (alternative application- more specific)
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